<p>Okay, I wrote one extracurricular essay on volunteering in the ER that is vivid, a bit and flowery-- it flow's well in the mind.. </p>
<p>I showed it to my friend and he said "i'm beating around the bush" and that I should just be straight-forward and say "I volunteer in the E.R. Over my year I've seen blah blah blah."</p>
<p>Which is more appropriate?</p>
<p>IM FREAKING OUT =[</p>
<p>c'mon, anyone?</p>
<p>send it over</p>
<p>Would someone mind answering this as a general question and not just based on this specific essay? I know a bunch of people who have wondered about how to approach this essay, myself included, and I tend to agree with the side that says it should tell more of a story or the emotional impact of the extracurricular, since they don't need a laundry list of what you did (hopefully that's already on your resume).</p>
<p>150 words does not leave you a lot of maneuverability to be flowery. Focus on the activity and what it means to you. By the time you do that sufficiently, you'll be at the 150 point.</p>
<p>I agree.
150 is just enough to elaborate on how the activity affected you.
Try to create a link between you and your activity. what does is mean to you?</p>