A Peculiar and Extenuating Situation in the realm of College Admissions

Chance Me / Match Me!
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<p>All:
I would like to relay a relatively brief dissertation of my rather tumultuous story and request additional professional feedback, as I wish for the most accurate conjecture possible. As a current high school junior, the growing anticipation of college admissions is a titanic attribute to the amount of stress that I am currently experiencing.</p>

<p>First, some preliminary information:</p>

<p>Grade - Highschool Junior
GPA UW - 3.37
GPA W - 3.65
Class Rank: Unspecified
SAT Scores: 2300
Math - 750
Reading - 800
Writing - 750
Extracurriculars and Honors:
4 Year Principal Chair of the All-County Bands and Orchestras for Trumpet
TRI-M Music Honors Society President
Roe Kappa President
President of Quill and Scroll Honors Society
President and Founder of Century High School Botanical Club (aimed at restoring the school's atrophied greenery and introducing locals to native plant species)
President of the HHSS Academy Executive Board
Marching Band Horn Sargent for Junior and Senior Years
Marching Band Member 9,10,11,12
Superior Rankings for Accredited Maryland Music Solo Performance Festival
Pit Orchestra Principal Trumpet 9,10,11,12
Winner of Various State-Wide Essay Contests (3 or 4)
Editor-in-chief of the school's Newspaper
Editor of Independent Local News Blog</p>

<p>With all of this in consideration, I would very much like to attend Johns Hopkins University - I will be applying Early Decision.</p>

<p>Now for my Story:</p>

<p>In the August of this year, 2014, I was diagnosed with a rare, viciously dynamic brain malady under the diagnosis of Cerebral Arteriovenous Malformation, a devastating diagnosis for my family but ironically brought me inexpressible joy, as I had experienced horrific decline in my cognitive abilities, intercranial bleeding, moderate aphasia, overall decrease in intelligence, and excruciating, perpetual headaches. Let's face it: this disease has made my life hell, tampering with the very thing that I pride myself in the most - my mind. I had always thought it arcane that my GPA was slipping so easily even though the rest of my peers were accelerating at an unprecedented rate in my school...I thought that I finally had an alleviation of my miserable symptoms. More recently, I have just received a high dose of gamma radiation with the hopes of the remission of this intusion but my oncologist and Neurosurgeon divulged that I really only have a 50% chance of this occurrence and that invasive brain surgery will be necessary, most likely. Interestingly enough, I have been receiving treatment at the world renowned Johns Hopkins Hospital, the university's next-door-neighbor and closely affiliated cousin. The fact of the matter is that this institution, an institution with the most wonderful minds in the fields of medicine, has been helping me change my life; they've offered me a way out of this maelstrom and I am incredibly ambitious about being apart of that. I want to study Neuroscience at the institution that saved my life and I wish to help others like me because of this unfortunate manifestation of a neurological disease - and I want to do it with the institution that helped me the most: Johns Hopkins.</p>

<p>With those things considered along with the fact that my mother is a faculty member, do you think that Johns Hopkins University would be a plausible destination of higher education for me? </p>

<p>I request respectful and honest answers. Thank you for reading. :) </p>

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<p>Your mom, or someone she works with, can put you in direct contact with the people in the admissions office who are responsible for faculty dependents. They are the people you need to speak with.</p>

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<p>First, people pay for professional advice. This is an open discussion board and you take what you can and leave the rest. There are students and parents and such mostly posting, mkay? </p>

<p>It seems that you really want JHU, so apply. Don’t worry if you are viable so much it is the right school you can just consider it your reach, or one of your reaches. No one can tell you if you are going to be accepted. Then get on with the rest of your list, as there are a lot of good colleges out there–don’t make the mistake to think your education is dependent on one college that rejects far more applicants than it accepts.</p>

<p>(Just a tip, when you go to write your personal essays for admission, it would serve you better to write in a more natural style . You don’t want your vocab to distract from your message, which is what I find here. And when you have overuse of SAT vocab then say ‘apart’ instead of ‘a part’ is doubly seems forced. Your vocab is great, don’t get me wrong, it is just something to be aware of.)</p>

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<p>Best wishes to you, I’ll pray for your situation.</p>

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<p>As one of the posters said above, your word choice seems a bit forced, like you’re consciously trying to show off your vocabulary knowledge. With your mom being a faculty member and with a dynamic story/essay like that, I wouldn’t worry too much. Hope your situation improves!</p>

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<p>yes, my vocabulary did appear forced in my writing - I wrote it at around midnight :stuck_out_tongue: Thank you to rango141 for actually answering my question in full and an additional thank you to trisherella for the wishes of better health. brownparent, I found your response to be quite prevalent of a rude tone, especially your remark of a minuscule linguistic error. Remember, this is not a professional forum, Brownparent; my writing is not intended to carry a formal disposition, much like your preliminary statement suggests. Thank you to all that responded with respectful inflection. Your mannerism is greatly valued in this trying period of my life. Thanks for the encouragement! </p>