ACT Writing

<p>Hey guys.</p>

<p>I've been prepping for the ACT for about two months now, but I haven't actually written an essay. Thus, today I found a prompt and set myself to writing. Except I'm not sure how to grade it. So I typed it here, and I was wondering if you guys could provide some feedback. Thanks!</p>

<p>Essay:</p>

<p>In an age of information feeding in from all directions, it is easy to get overwhelmed. For high school students especially, the internet, social media, and other distractions are incredibly detractive to focus and productivity. Indeed, dividing their attentions between multiple activities is too distracting for students when they are doing homework.</p>

<p>In China, there’s a story about a little kitten who goes fishing. Wanting to be a better fisher than his mother, he initially waits patiently for the line to catch. But he is soon distracted, and goes off to catch butterflies while his mother continues reeling in their dinner. In the end, the kitten only succeeds in catching a fish after his mother tells him to focus on one task at a time and do the activity at hand wholeheartedly or not at all. The same can be said about homework: either do it with all of one’s concentration, or don’t even attempt it.</p>

<p>While we’re not all fable characters that teach kids lessons, many other examples in the real world prove the same point. There is a funny little test, for instance, that involves patting one’s head with one hand and rubbing one’s belly with the other. Most times, the result is that the subject will involuntarily begin either rubbing their head or patting their belly, and everyone gets a laugh out of it. But the trick proves a point: human minds are trained to only be able to focus on one activity at a time. This idea also applies to students doing their homework. When their minds are divided among multiple tasks, students will still only be able to focus on one activity, the other taking the backseat. Thus, even if they believe they are multitasking, students are still only concentrating on one task, and the other often is done sloppily and halfheartedly.</p>

<p>In application, the number one distraction for teenagers in today’s world is the internet. With sites such as Facebook and Twitter, it is extremely tempting to hop on and check what new updates there are. I personally find myself periodically browsing the web, even when I am in the middle of a math problem. Then, when I resume work, I have already lost my train of thought, and the rest of the problem is done poorly. Many of my classmates are even worse off, with their browsers perpetually open, their phone in hands and buzzing every few seconds, their earbuds in blasting music, and even the tv on in the background, creating even more distractions. It is no wonder then, that they often go to bed well beyond midnight, their homework still not completed.</p>

<p>All in all, too many tasksd being done at once detracts from the quality and quantity of work done. Like water split between many cups, students only have so much focus and dividing it hurts all. So maybe it’s sometimes needed to just put aside the phone, unplug from distractions, and just pour all effort into one place.</p>

<p>I got a 9 on the ACT writing both times I have taken it, which is considered pretty good (Anything over an 8 is good, 6 or 7 is average)</p>

<p>First red flag I noticed in your essay is your usage of first person. DONT USE FIRST PERSON. ACT graders are looking for a formal essay. not only are you using first person but you also switched tenses. Stick to 3rd person and you should be fine in that aspect. </p>

<p>Your usage of antedotes and relation to stories in good.</p>

<p>Also you could organize the essay a bit better. You didn’t get to talking about social networking until your 3rd body paragraph. Although it might make your essay seem more boring, they like to see that your essay is organized where you have an intro, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Within the body paragraphs they want you to have one or two main ideas and a couple detail to back each of those up.</p>

<p>And just a tip timing wise. I found that writing my fastest while still thinking of good ideas I was only able to fill in about the first 2 pages of the test, but it all depends on how big you write obviously. When taking the writing part pacing is important (just like the rest of the ACT). I also recommend leaving at least 3 minutes or so to read over your writing to make sure there is no random mistakes. I did this both times taking the ACT and found at least a couple parts where I wrote a different word than I meant to write or something and the sentence made no sense. You also could use this time to make sure you stayed in 3rd person. Good luck. </p>