an offhand statement in my essay?

Colleges and Universities A-Z Yale University
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<p>in the yale supplement, the basic gist of my essay was how learning english has impacted me and other experiences with bilingual people, and how that diversity has taught me</p>

<p>and, i might include a sentence in there that would go somehting to the effect of:
"Yale is where the future leaders of america break bread, and offering my perspective can possibly foster a more tolerant future for our world."</p>

<p>is that little out there, or a little pretentious, flattering, i dont know how to explain it? it just sounds really out of place, sounds like i might be sucking up. what do you think of that? or is it okay and should be used in my essay?</p>

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<p>I wouldn't end with that if I were you. They should be able to get a sense of that anyway from your essay. Remember to show and not tell! </p>

<p>Just my two cents. :) Good luck!</p>