Anyone bother to read my common app essay?

<p>I'm pretty sure my essay is pretty good, but just want to make sure.
My essay should be grammatically and structurally perfect, so there isn't any much work to do. I just want to know how good it is from your perspective.</p>

<p>What’s it about? </p>

<p>I might be interested.</p>

<p>It’s about how I came to the States. I think it’s really interesting.</p>

<p>Really.Where’s you move from?</p>

<p>S. Korea.
It’s all in my essay, you down?</p>

<p>Yea dawg, PM that stuff to me. I’m probably have time on Wednesday.</p>