<p>I wrote it on a whim, so I'm not sure how well it will work for college applications, or if it's even the kind of thing that they're looking for. </p>
<p>I know that the flow isn't perfect at this point. I'm mostly looking for imput on my topic and how I played it out. </p>
<p>Any takers? I'd prefer someone a bit older. </p>
<p>Thanks in advance.</p>