Anyone want to read my UC Essays?

Applying to College
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<p>I've just finished questions 1 and 2 and I was wondering if anyone would like to read/critique them? </p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

2

<p>Sure, private message it to me. Include which UCs you're applying to and your stats/ECs (GPA,SATs,APs)</p>

3

<p>i can read if you need help =)</p>

4

<p>yeah, sure, Private message me.</p>

5

<p>i'll read them</p>

6

<p>ill help - PM it over</p>

7

<p>I'll read them. :)</p>

8

<p>I'll read them.</p>

9

<p>ill comment on them</p>

10

<p>Both of them started out good; they caught my attention. But they slowly lost me. I was expecting something more in the second one, it turned out a bit boring. Telling colleges what they want to hear about maturity is a bit weird to me. Tell them what you have to say. Actually don't tell them, show them. Describe what happened at the concert on UCSD campus.</p>

11

<p>i want to read!</p>

12

<p>i ll read it</p>