<p>It's a rough draft, and i felt good after writing it. However, after letting it rest for a couple of days, I find it dull. Anyone willing to take a look and see how i can improve this?</p>
<p>Btw, the college is Amherst, and it's the first option. So, people who are attempting this one would be better advised to not read mine, even though it is not great, because it might hamper your own creative awesomeness :)</p>
<p>Post here, and I'll pm you.</p>