Anyone willing to look my personal statement over?

Applying to College
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<p>I have a general personal statement, but I fear that the tone (simplicity = good, progress = moral and social deterioration) will contradict the fact that I plan to be a doctor. My H. English teacher last year gave me the only 100% out of the class, but I'm still iffy about using it. </p>

<p>So far I may be using it for MSU (in-state safety, but the Med Scholars program is a reach) and Brown, which is a definite reach.</p>

<p>Any constructive criticism you could give me is appreciated. :)</p>

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<p>sure ill read it! </p>

<p>ps- im from michigan too! where else are you applying?</p>

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<p>hmmmm maybe if we trade? pm me if u want</p>

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<p>I'll read it. Would you be willing to read mine?</p>

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<p>I'll read it, pm me. I'll send you mine whenever I get around to finishing it.</p>

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<p>i' ll read it</p>

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<p>Woo. PMing them all now, and I'm perfectly willing to swap essays. :) </p>

<p>My finalized* list is as follows:</p>

<p>MSU (safety)
UMich (safe match)
Northwestern (reach)
WUSTL (reach)
Dartmouth (reach)
Brown (reach)</p>

<p>I know it's reach-heavy, but there's no point in applying to more matches that are of equal or lesser academic caliber than UMich because I have a good shot of getting in, and everywhere else would be OOS, more expensive, or both.</p>

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<p>I'll read it too</p>

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<p>PMed. :) </p>

<p>And the asterik by my 'finalized list'.. I forgot to put that in, and it won't let me edit. It's supposed to say at the bottom:</p>

<ul>
<li>finalized: adj., last change made within past two weeks</li>
</ul>

<p>I keep switching up my schools and swapped Cornell for Dartmouth a week and a half ag, but I'm pretty sure those are my final six.</p>

<p>[/ill-disguised bump]</p>