Anyone willing to read/critique my UC Essay Prompt #2?

College Essays
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<p>(Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?)</p>

<p>It's my very first draft, so I'm looking for opinions. :) Thank you. I'll pm it to you.</p>

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<p>Me. :)</p>

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<p>I’d be willing to read it</p>

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<p>I graduated from a UC. I can take a look if you like. </p>