<p>Will read your essays in return :)</p>
<p>I will! Do you just want me to read it since the deadline has passed? Pm me with it and ill send you mine</p>
<p>Deadline for cornell isn’t over yet</p>
<p>I’ll send them now :)</p>
<p>And ya, the deadline hasn’t passed yet (coming up fast tho!)</p>
<p>I will, you can send them! And the deadline is quickly approaching.</p>
<p>i can read them</p>
<p>I’d be more than happy to read it for you :)</p>
<p>PM it to me? :D</p>
<p>i realized that i can’t pm yet, do you want me to post my suggestions for your essays or email them to you or something?</p>
<p>I really liked them. Which is your first and which is your alternate? I like describing the beginnings if your interests. My only concern is that maybe you talk too much about Cornell and not enough about yourself. Ill pm you mine once I can so you can see</p>
<p>I can read it too if you still want advice.</p>
<p>Good Thesis Statement
Evidence is supported with specific details
Overall the essay is excellent. The specific questions in the prompt was addressed.
Could sentences be shortened? Just a thought
Talk a little more about yourself</p>
<p>College of Arts and Science Essay
Put as after Growing Up?
Diction is excellent
Space out Truly Sparked</p>
<p>Both essays are great and will definitely impress admission reps! One essay you express interest in economic study, while the other states you are undecided of your field of study.</p>
<p>I’d be willing to read them and add commentary if you’d like! :)</p>