applying to HYP, anyone want to read my VERY rough draft?

<p>preferably someone experienced. i am very sensitive about what i write so please no stealing/sharing with anyone.
it is a weird topic...about being black :p lol....well sort of actually o_O</p>

<p>well anyways, please help</p>

<p>yea really…i would appreciate any guidance be/c this essay is a huge risk (well imo)
i will read yours in return</p>

<p>hi, i could help :p</p>

<p>will read and provide lots of feedback! </p>

<p><a href="mailto:nick.bottom2@gmail.com">nick.bottom2@gmail.com</a></p>

<p>Hopefully I can provide some tips!
email me at <a href="mailto:tammypomme@gmail.com">tammypomme@gmail.com</a></p>

<p>anyone else?</p>