<p>Hey everyone, </p>
<p>I've been getting lots of questions about personal statements. A good way to write a stellar one is to first read and critique a lot of them. I used to read PS's for fun, and here is some advice. </p>
<p>The goal of the personal statement is to tell the admissions committees something about yourself that is not made obvious by anything else in your application. It should not be a rehash of anything you've already written. They already have your resume.</p>
<p>This is the way that most personal statements read:
First couple paragraphs: Description of patient X with Y condition
Next few paragraphs: What situation with patient X taught you about yourself, the healthcare system, and how situation inspired you to become a doctor
Final few paragraphs: A rehash of your resume that also supports your desire to be a doctor</p>
<p>Imagine for a minute that you're a medical school admissions director and you've suddenly got 2,000 applications on your desk to review. You're trying to decide who to interview and you get about 75% of applicants who's personal statements are written in the above format. Any deviation from the above will immediately pique your interest in an applicant. </p>
<p>Take this personal statement for example: Medical</a> Section: Sample Essays
The student writes about a very exciting medical experience then discusses the importance of understanding culture and his passion for urban medicine. He briefly describes relevant experiences from his education and activities. He avoids rehash and only mentions those aspects of the resume that are relevant. </p>
<p>Some of the most poignant personal statements I have read have managed to take something that's not overtly medically related and then bring the topic to medicine all the while weaving in relevant experiences but not repeating what's already been said about them. Check out this personal statement: Medical</a> Section: Sample Essays</p>
<p>This statement is excellent. The student gives us insight into his childhood and reflects on several experiences that have made him the person he is today. The theme of the essay is determination and resiliency, and he takes a few LIMITED experiences and tells stories about them in a way that ties them into the essay's theme. </p>
<p>I think it's a good idea to read the sample essays on this site:
Medical</a> Section: Sample Essays</p>
<p>Check this out too:
Health</a> Professions Program - Tips for Writing Personal Statements</p>
<p>** Things to avoid **
1. You want to avoid using too many generalities. You want to "show" not "tell". For instance, rather than saying something like, "I like to help people", you'll want to use a specific example and let the reader see that for him/herself; instead say something like, "Teaching English to ESL students was a rewarding experience; I got tremendous satisfaction from knowing that I played a small part in their future success." A good example of how NOT to write is here: Medical</a> Section: Sample Essays</p>
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<li><p>You'll want to avoid talking about politically controversial issues. If you worked for a political campaign, I would avoid using that as a jump-off for your personal statement. Avoid issues like abortion, euthanasia, etc. </p></li>
<li><p>Avoid language that is culturally sensitive (example: use "urban" or "metropolitan" instead of "inner-city"; use "indigent" instead of "lower-class"). Remember that people of many different backgrounds may be reading your essay and may be put off by some language. The best way to ensure that you're not doing this is to have people from many different backgrounds read your statement. </p></li>
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<p>You should write several drafts of your personal statement and get several people to read and critique your work. Once you've got it in its final form, have an experienced editor or an English professor do a final run through. </p>
<p>Finally, here are some websites that underscore what I've already discussed. I am willing to read some FINAL copies of personal statements, though I really don't have the time to be too involved in the editing/development process. I can however, provide some last minute commentary. Best of luck and I hope this helps.</p>