At a loss! Which topic?

College Essays
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<p>CommonApp Activity Essay </p>

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<p>I really can't decide which one would be more significant:</p>

<p>1) On something about how I am the President of my county student government and all the things I've help push through the board of ed and state assembly and why i love the job so much, and it's a really big impressive thing, but I feel like it would be more factual than anything</p>

<p>2) This really kind of not even official babysitting, or actually kind of just hanging out with my 6th grade little cousin once a week after school. It's not that big of a deal, but I'm proud of it because it gives her something to look forward to during her parents divorce</p>

<p>They could both be good essays, I'm just sure what the colleges would be looking for. They're both kind of profound in their own ways.</p>

<p>HELP! please</p>

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<p>All right, first essay sounds like a factual resume that, in the end, tells us the readers next to nothing about who you are. Second essay sounds more personal, but judging by the way you described it I do not think it will make a great essay.</p>

<p>Remember, the essay is not meant to promote your ostensible achievements; it is about revealing your qualities, values, and character to the readers. Focus more on inner personal development as opposed to just narrating your successes.</p>

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<p>^I agree. First seems too boring and general, second seems too insignificant. Consider a more creative and deep response.</p>