Bad example on the essay?

Test Preparation
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<p>I had the memories and success one. For my first, I wrote a personal one about how my best friend (made-up) is so in the memories of her abusive bf that she still can't succeed. The second, I had about how people shouldn't blindly remember the Holocaust and hate Hitler and blame his crimes on the whole German race. Makes no sense; oh well, my pencil thought for me. Was this a horrible example? I was regretting it all the way through the test. </p>

<p>I also had a 3rd example about some Chinese princess who stayed in an invaded city simply because she believed so much in the glory days of her kingdom. Made-up. </p>

<p>Everything was crappy. But it's quantity, not quality.</p>

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<p>don make up stuff...the ppl are cynical thus if its not solid facts they will think u r lying...</p>

<p>and bout hitler...unless the person is totally indifferent, u r dead</p>

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<p>Why make everything up? Better to have 2 real, solid examples than 3 bizarre ones.</p>

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<p>Better to have time to finish my essay than to have time run out half way through the conclusion.</p>

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<p>You think yours are crappy?</p>

<p>I used Reagan and Carter for a historical example, then used One that Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest as a literary example, but couldn't remember the name McMurphy! Calling him 'patient' sure won't get me very many points! And to top it off, I wasn't even able to finish my conclusion. Boy am I anxious to see my essay score :(</p>

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<p>Well, at least you -had- some names. :(</p>

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<p>i started to ramble on about how military alliances caused World war I and then world war II(which sort of contridicts my point), so now the EU is like remembering the past and not doing military alliances anymore. It was so incohesive, if the person reading mine isn't so clear on history facts, they are going to be so confused. Then i got half way through one about the holocaust when time was up.
This sucks</p>

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<p>Sounds like everyone wrote steller essays this time around.</p>

<p>Oh well, 2/3 of the points for WR comes from multiple choice, so dont worry too much</p>

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<p>Same here dwerbowy...i used all military examples :(
About how from the American Rev. we didn't know NOT to go into vietnam and how from vietnam we shouldn't still be in iraq. I also talked about how you should NEVER assasult the Russian homeland during the winter! lol once i relized i was rambling it was too late...</p>

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<p>I thought it was quality, not quantity.........................which is it?</p>

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<p>I've heard that they look at how long it is to figure out whether it is a 1-3 essay or a 4-6 essay and then take 1-2 min to read it and pick a final score</p>

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<p>Well, I got 11 and 760 last time, so I'm hoping the reader doesn't pay too much attention to the essay.</p>

<p>Nah. It's definitely quantity that matters on the essay.</p>

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<p>kalini, last time i filled it up entirely, conclusion and everything, but i only got a 9.
How long was yours?</p>

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<p>Filled it up entirely. </p>

<p>I did the same in March and I got an 11.</p>

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<p>willmington wave... so ironic, i also talked about napoleon and his seige of st. petersburg in winter... and how hitler, "suppressed the idea" believing he was supreme, and made the same folly</p>

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<p>Went halfway down the second page in march and got an 11...</p>

<p>maybe they check to make sure that it goes longer than one page and then check for quality...</p>

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<p>lol thats funny cujoe--</p>

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<p>i wrote about the persistence of thomas edison and the re building of donald trumps empire after he filed for bankrupcty</p>

<p>haha</p>

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<p>I was thinking about doing that one Witzness--I read about it in one of his books.</p>

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<p>Are these examples bad: pilgrims separating from england; baby learning to walk; and Franklin's Autogbiography?</p>