beginning of my bryn mawr essay?

College Essays
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<p>I've just started writing my essay for Bryn Mawr. I only have two paragraphs so far, but could anyone critique what I have now? I want to make sure I'm on the right track and I'm not sounding stereotypical. There might be some grammar and usage errors, because I haven't really gotten the opportunity to ask anyone to proof it but for now I just want a critique. </p>

<p>I'll PM it to anyone who wants to read it. You can be as harsh as you want. I appreciate candor!</p>

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<p>bump. (10 char)</p>

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<p>any advice would be sooo appreciated.</p>

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<p>Sure, I'll have a look.</p>

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<p>thankyou! (10 char)</p>

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<p>anyone else? pleasee</p>

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<p>bump. it's really short and wouldn't take much time to look over :]</p>

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<p>i wouldn't mind! :]</p>

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<p>I'll read it. Class of '09, but not applying to Bryn Mawr. :)</p>

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<p>thankyou! anyone else :)</p>

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<p>Class of '09... apply for Wellesley... i'd love to read BMC essays... PM me = )
Best >.<</p>

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<p>I'd love to read it.. I'm assuming this is the supplement essay?</p>