<p>@satman1111 For Critical Reading, I take words that I don’t know from the blue book and make them into flashcards.</p>
<p>For the essay, I consistently use two examples, Gandhi and Brave New World. I write around four paragraphs: intro, 2 bodies, conclusion.</p>
<p>Do you think providing 3 examples instead of 2 would increase my essay score to a 11? </p>
<p>My January essay (score 10):</p>
<p>Prompt- Is it possible for a society to be fair to everyone?</p>
<p>Although it is ideal for societies to be fair and just to everyone, it is actually quixotic to believe that societies are fair to everyone. For example, Mahatma Gandhi had to peacefully protest for his rights under the British Empire in Indian, where inequality was prevalent. Moreover, in literature, Aldous Huxley’s Brave New World, Bernard and Helmholtz Watson are subjugated under intense scrutiny under their society, the World State, because their society is highly stratified and unequal by treating people differently.
During the early 1900s, the British Empire ruled India as a colony and exploited the Indians for their resources. Many Indians suffered under the British, especially when the British passed the 1882 Salt Act, which is a heavy tax on salt. The Indian peasants could not pay such a gargantuan tax because they were already impoverished. Concerned for the lack of representation for the Indians, Gandhi led the Dandi March on March 12, 1930. Gandhi and thousands of Indians marched to the coastal village of Dandi in order to make “illegal salt” against the 1882 Salt Act. Consequently, Gandhi and his followers were arrested and beaten at Dharasana a few days later. Mahatma Gandhi only wanted fair representation for the Indians. However, the British unjustly punished him for his nonviolent actions toward equality. If the British society were fair, Gandhi and the Indians would have achieved their rights without any prejudice or violence against them. </p>
<p>Similarly, Bernard and Helmholtz suffered inequality under the World State in Brave New World. The World State has a caste system: Alpha, Beta, Delta, Gamma, and Epsilon. Bernard is conditioned to be an Alpha, but he is physically inept and burdened by his fellow Alphas because they think he should belong to a lower caste. As a result, Bernard is a pariah in his society, utterly alone and treated unfairly. Additionally, Helmholtz is an Alpha who suffers unfairness. Because Helmholtz is extremely intelligent and physically adept, he is also treated unfairly. Society expects too much from Helmholtz and he often feels pressured to meet those unrealistic expectations. Society cannot possibly be considered fair or just if it contains a caste system and treats its citizens differently. As a result, many people within the World State, including Bernard and Helmholtz, fell isolated from society because of the pronounced divisions within the World State.
Therefore, both history and literature have demonstrated that society cannot be fair to everyone. Society often has disparities between different social classes and economic classes. As exemplified by Gandhi, Helmholtz, and Bernard, society is built on inequality, even though numerous people have tried to change this unfairness. </p>
<p>(I know I’m rather redundant in my essay. I could cut out and refine a few sentences.)</p>