Boredom

<p>Here's a short free verse poem I wrote without any sort of revision or creative deep thinking, hence my boredomness catched on.</p>

<p>Rate it please..</p>

<p>Upper cut to the chin, apathetic, I beg for more.
Stare at the screen for eternity, pupils' rebel.
Procrastina.... devours time like water cascading from the shower.
Indulging myself to gore, suicide, genocide, I am numb as a flower.</p>

<p>Entity is tedious, games merely deceive the mind's of the adolescence.
Consistency tears my heart, implying to repeat the obvious.
Failure in aspiration, preparing for the battle, not for the war.
Impassive, I ride time as if it were a wave on the surface of the ocean.</p>

<p>Hmmm I'm not good with poetry, but it doesn't sound that bad. :) However, this line --> "Consistency tears my heart, implying to repeat the obvious" may sound a little cliche with the "tears my heart". I wish I had time for boredom.</p>

<p>Any more comments?</p>

<p>I liked it the first time I read it.
Hated it the next.
Liked it the next. </p>

<p>I like some of the lines, a lot of it is too cliche. There really is no flow either. I tend to like poetry like this, but you need a little more flow and connection between the lines. </p>

<p>However, without editing, I give it a 17/20. I was gonna say 8.5/10, but I don't like decimals in fractions. It bothers me.</p>

<p>I am bored as well.</p>

<p>*I was gonna say 8.5/10, but I don't like decimals in fractions. It bothers me.
*</p>

<p>rofl</p>

<p>Poetry, in the modern sense, is largely more about self expression than perfection... haha, but I do agree regarding certain cliche lines</p>

<p>llpitch, it really does... it's a fraction within a fraction... it's BOTHERSOME.</p>

<p>I think I just found an OCD tendency...</p>

<p>Haha, mine involes hand sanitizer</p>