Can anyone grade my SAT essay?

<p>Hi, I'm changing my essay style to suit the SAT format since I always seem to run out of time while writing essays. I'm used to writing really long, detailed essays but I need to change it so it's short, simple, and concise. I'm aiming for a perfect score in my essay in the SAT exam next month. So I need to write a practice essay with a perfect score and I will use it as my exemplar essay when writing future essays. So this is one I wrote, so can you grade it and give me feedback please? Thanks.</p>

<p>What is your view on the idea that success can begin with failure?</p>

<p>‘Failure is the parent of success.’ Through the lessons taught by failure, human beings learn to innovate themselves and strive for success with tenacity. Basketball legend Michael Jordan exemplifies that quote through his phenomenal career that dubiously originated from modest beginnings. Harland Sanders, the founder and face of KFC, is another example of success rooting from failure seen through his journey from his modest upbringing to founding one of the largest fast food chains in the world. </p>

<p>Basketball legend Michael Jordan, unbelievable as it sounds, wasn’t always the best at his sport. Despite his hard work-ethics he inherited from his father, he was rejected from his high school basketball team as he was deemed ‘too short’ and ‘hopeless’ by his coach. His career seemed further doubtful as he ‘missed more than 9000 shots’ in his career, ‘lost almost 300 games’, and missed ‘the game winning shot’ during ’26 occasions.’ His repetitive failures and hard work-ethics fueled his tenacity, driving him to reach the pinnacle of his career in the 1990s. This would lead to him becoming one of the most famous and respected men in the world. As a result, he popularized the sport of basketball and cemented his status as an icon of both basketball and pop culture in general. By witnessing the poignant strength and tenacity possessed by Michael Jordan, we learn that only through failure and self-education do we come to succeed and permanently cement our legacy as Michael Jordan did with basketball.</p>

<p>Solely famous for his iconic face on the KFC logo, Colonel Harland Sanders bears a phenomenal life whose success rose from the ashes of failure. Growing up in a poor family, Sanders dropped out of school and worked modest jobs in numerous businesses that all ended up in failure. After discovering his passion for cooking fried chicken, he dedicated his life to formulating the perfect recipe for his chicken while seeking a business that would accept his formula. He sacrificed ten years of his life doing so and his formula had been rejected 1009 times before finally being accepted. Regardless of his seemingly hopeless modest lifestyle, Sanders had finally come to success as a multi-millionaire at the average retiring age of 65. We learn from Harland Sanders and his life that regardless of how hopeless and modest our lifestyle seems to be, we are never too late in discovering our passion and becoming successful. Through the failures encountered on his journey to success, we learn that failure is indeed the parent of success and that success can never exist without failure.</p>

<p>Failure is often perceived as a sign of weakness and humiliation that is to be denied. It is only like that if we allow our failures to define us as human beings. Strong, successful men such as Michael Jordan and Harland Sanders never yielded to their failures. Instead, they used it to their advantage to better themselves in order to pursue their dreams and paradise of success they desire. Failure is either our best friend or worst enemy, depending on how we perceive it.</p>

<p>It doesn’t need to seem real, I’d say 11 because of flow but tbh they would probably give you a 12.</p>

<p>Thanks for all your feedback people~~ anymore? I’d just like as much feedback as possible.</p>