Can anyone read my college essay?

<p>Applying early.. deadline is in 3 days. I just threw together an essay in about 40 minutes (I know this is bad, but I've already written about 3 or 4 essays in the last month and none seem to work out.) It's a pretty simple essay, so if anybody wouldn't mind reading it and giving me some suggestions on how I could change/improve it, that would be much appreciated. Thanks</p>

<p>bump. anyone?</p>

<p>I’ve had the same issue and I feel for you. My college counselor told me yesterday she doesn’t like my Common App essay and I’m applying early. PM it over</p>

<p>sent, thank you. anyone else?</p>

<p>i wouldnt mind reading it, in return can you crituqe mine?</p>

<p>sure i’ll try. PMing now thanks</p>

<p>can anyone else give it a look over? need some more criticism. thanks</p>

<p>Sure, send it on.</p>

<p>sent, thanks</p>

<p>Fixed it up a bit, but I’m sure there’s still many ways to improve. If anyone wouldn’t mind reading it and telling me specific ways or actually helping me out a bit, it would be greatly appreciated… getting a little overwhelmed here two days before the deadline. thanks</p>

<p>haha idk if i can be of much help but i’ll try my best if you message it to me (:</p>

<p>anyone else really quick? planning on sending out apps sometime today.</p>

<p>bump, i think the essay itself is basically as good as it’s going to get, but I could really use some help wrapping it up in the conclusion and coming up with a title. anyone mind helping?</p>

<p>sure if you want swap with mine, pm it. I’m okay at writing and I can offer you my opinions at least.</p>

<p>sure, sending now</p>

<p>bump again, desperate for help on my conclusion.</p>