Can anyone read my waitlist statement?

<p>Recently, I've been working on my waitlist statement, so I would really like you all to actually read and provide critiques on it however you want. And reading it makes me feel that the thing is going in a wrong order. I REALLY WANT TO GET PICKED OFF THE WAITLIST!! Please help me out. Thanks, amigo.</p>

<p>wanna exchange statements? i was also waitlisted</p>

<p>I could take a look and give you a critique. (as long as its not more than 2 pages)</p>

<p>I’ll read. I got in to Columbia but haven’t decided for sure where I’m gonna go… My best mate got waitlisted though, I know what it feels like to want to go somewhere more than anything in the world. Send it over! I’ll give all the feedback I can.</p>

<p>@ bicyclekick: I really don’t know. would that help? (I’ve only prepared a first draft!!)</p>

<p>@ stanford09 and rie_91: sure, thanks.</p>

<p>I would really love to have the statement critiqued by all of the admitted/current students. thanks</p>