Can somebody pls rate my essay and comment down below. It will extremely helpful

My essay: Television viewing is pretty arbitrary these days. People are more addicted to it rather than spending time with their beloved kith and kins. It is severely affecting their social life. but people are not apt to understand this. It is an experience of my life. One afternoon, I called Lalita, one of my best friend from middle school. She agreed to have a backchat when I had called her. But when I reached her home, she welcomed me with a wide hug and asked me to take a seat on the sofa. The TV was still on even when they offered me snacks and drinks. She never turned off the TV and even when I left she even didn’t care to wave goodbye. I felt my visit to Lalita’s place was a total waste of time and friendship. She considered TV to be more important than our friendship and the bond we had built for nine years. TV watching is directing to a condition where spouses hold no time to discuss about their children or fortifying their relations. The elders and seniors in the family too feel dismissed since there is nobody to backchat. If you ask on any of your intimate relatives or friends during the afternoon to have a chat with them, frequently you will find them in their quarters more engrossed in the TV channels than providing attention to your visit. You will be welcomed and seated on a sofa with the TV on. If they receive you and turn off the TV then you are fortunate. You feel glad that your desire to spend your time with friends has been met. Hence TV is widening the gap of the relation between friends and families with close ties. On the other end, TV was a great way to increase social life when it was viewed communally. It was during my mom’s time when her neighbors would also congregate in her apartment to watch TV shows which were released twice a week. “It used to be a great and amazing night,” my mom said. On the topic of relationships, everyone has turned into a Lalita and Andy Warhol, they have stopped caring and are ignoring their loved ones. This will bring down depression and isolation on society . As marvelous as the invention seems, TV drives people apart and makes the relation between them bitter. Tv can only be considered marvelous when watched and enjoyed communally, which is creating a social and as well as mental enjoyment.

What is this essay for? Knowing that would focus comments

Never post essays publicly. If someone does a search it could be flagged as being plagiarism.

@Stanfordmed03 Sorry what is a backchat? looking it up didn’t give me the answer either. Someone could try to use this as their essay which is why people suggest not to post it online

Tone down your thesaurus usage.

Re-read post #2. At this point, any comments are useless; you can’t use this essay because you posted it online. It’s been up for a day and half. It would be flagged for plagiarism.

As others have said, this essay is now null and void due to you posting it… With that being said, you should really work on your grammar. In addition, this essay has a lot of fluff that was unnecessary and was a headache to read.

I see this is in the SAT prep forum, so it’s not homework. I think it needs to be more focused. You make a lot of assertions with no authority to back them up. Watching TV causes depression? Who says?

Do you realize that SAT essays are written in response to a prompt? You don’t get to write on a random topic that you pick.