Can Someone Critique My Essay Please?

I am applying Early Action and need help!

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Edited post to eliminate the screaming all-caps.

I can help. Is it for the ED/EA deadline? Keep in mind that I am a high school senior I’d that’s fine with you.

That’s totally fine, I will pm it to you. Thanks a lot.

Read this: Make sure your essay is one only you could write.

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If you need another reader, PM me too.

Glad to critique as well, though it might be cutting it close considering it’s 3:41pm EST.