Can someone critique my UC personal statements?

College Essays
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<p>Hi. I would like some constructive criticism on my UC personal statements. If you would like to read it, please reply to this thread and I will PM you it. Thanks!</p>

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<p>Sure, copy and paste it in a PM and send it to me.</p>

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<p>Sure message me. My email is <a href="mailto:santana1305@live.com">santana1305@live.com</a>. Or pm me if you can</p>

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<p>Sure! PM me! I’m done with mine and hit submit so nothing to worry about :)</p>

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<p>You can email it to me if you’d like andres.garcia_1 @ y a h o o . c o m</p>