Can someone give me feedback on my essay? I'll return the favor!

[killbeefgoham]

<p>It's not a long essay, and I'll read yours if you critique mine. Thanks in advance!</p>

[mcgillian2014]

<p>YEAH SURE!, pm me asap though,
thanks!</p>

[sahihosahi]

<p>Yeah. u can pm me…</p>