Can someone please read my essay?

<p>It's for the common app. </p>

<p>"Write about why you want to transfer and what objectives you hope to achieve."</p>

<p>Basically, I'm a student at a CC hoping to transfer to a university. I've never written a college admission essay before. Keep in mind this is for the common app, which says it should be written so it can be sent to any college. Not written about a certain college. I'd like the person who reads my essay to have experience reviewing/writing essays themselves. Please feel free to offer any advice. More is better than none! :)</p>

<p>So, if you're bored or just have some free time, post and I may PM it to you.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>I’ll read it</p>