<p>Actually, I've already done this essay....
BUT, I really improved this one using advice and essay guides, so I hope it will get a better score than my last one. I would really appreciate it if someone graded this essay! Some questions about my essay:</p>
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<li>Did I oversimplify it?</li>
<li>Is it too long?</li>
<li>Were my two examples specific and effective enough?</li>
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<p>Thank you!</p>
<p>*My previous, not-so-improved essay is on the bottom. </p>
<p>TOPIC
"A man should never be ashamed to own he has been in the wrong, which is but saying, in other words, that he is wiser today than he was yesterday.
Alexander Pope</p>
<p>Assignment:
Do we learn more from finding out that we have made mistakes or from our successful actions? Plan and write an essay...</p>
<p>IMPROVED ESSAY
Do we learn more from finding out that we have made mistakes or from our successful actions? Failure and success are two paths that lead to the same destination. In failure, one can learn from mistakes to be successful next time, whereas in success, one knows what to do to achiever other successes. For example, Douglass MacArthur strategic mistakes lead to Americas victory in the Korean War, while the repeated and successful use of guerrilla warfare caused North Vietnam to win the Vietnam War. Therefore, people learn from both winning and losing equally because learning from one failure can lead to another success and because success gives you a model to follow.</p>
<p>To begin with, learning from ways you have failed helps you to set the stage for success. For example, the Korean War and Douglass MacArthur were both a failure and a success. MacArthur, commander of the American forces, was sent to Korea when North Korea had almost completely taken over South Korea. Being the great strategist he was, MacArthur took back all of South Korea. His only mistake was to push further in North Korea. When he reached Chinas border, China reinforced North Korea. This resulted in devastating losses in the U.S. Army and much of South Korea taken by the North again. MacArthur paid for his mistakes, and he was removed from his post as a commander. However, America learned from his mistake and refused to aggravate North Korea and China by pushing back the border yet again. In the end, both countries settled for a completely free South Korea and a completely Communist North Korea. Learning from the mistakes of Douglass MacArthur set America for success and turned around the Korean War.</p>
<p>Furthermore, one success shows you how to achieve the same thing over and over again. For example, guerrilla warfare was used in the Vietnam War by North Vietnam repeatedly. North Vietnam soldiers had the advantage of knowing the dense jungle terrain and using it to gain the upper hand. These soldiers used Guerrilla Warfare, a method of concealing an army under the jungle, with successful results. These quick ambushes could accomplish several things at once: kill enemy soldiers, destroy ammunition, and blow up combat vehicles. To North Vietnam, these were all huge successes. Historians agree that by repeatedly using Guerrilla Warfare, North Vietnam greatly shortened the war while America suffered huge losses. One success, like using Guerrilla Warfare in one battle, can show you how to achieve even more success, like all the other battles that North Vietnam won using Guerrilla Warfare.</p>
<p>Failure and success are really two same things, except that one has a reward and a different name. Despite this, you learn the same amount and experience the same thing each way. First of all, learning from the mistakes of MacArthur in the Korean War, America succeeded in winning it. Second, using Guerrilla Warfare once and see how successful it was, North Vietnam used it repeatedly to win the Vietnam War. Some say losers are winners while others say winning is everything. In reality, losers and winners gain the same experience, knowledge, and insight, and, in the end, thats what matters most.</p>
<p>UNIMPROVED ESSAY
Winning or reaching a goal is what everybody strives for. However, we sometimes lose or fail to achieve what we want. Many people say that losing gives you the chance to learn from your mistakes, but others say that winning sets an example. What is the real truth? People learn from both winning and losing equally because learning from one failure can lead to another success and because success gives you a model to follow.</p>
<p>To begin with, learning from ways you have failed helps you to set the stage for success. For example, the Korean War and Douglass MacArthur were both a failure and a success. MacArthur, commander of the American forces, was sent to Korea when North Korea had almost completely taken over South Korea. Being the great strategist he was, MacArthur took back all of South Korea. His only mistake was to push further in North Korea. When he reached Chinas border, China reinforced North Korea. MacArthur was removed from his post, but America learned from his mistake and refused to aggravate North Korea and China by pushing back the border. Learning from mistakes can turn one failure into another success.</p>
<p>Furthermore, one success shows you how to achieve the same thing over and over again. For example, getting a six on a SAT essay is no simple thing. However, once I got a six on one of my practice essays, I repeated this over and over again. My score was also repeated over and over again. I had learned the structure of a good essay, not just for SAT, but also for college and jobs. My successes just once lead to multiple other successes. Winning and being successful can show you the right way to do so, resulting in much more winning and success! </p>
<p>Failure and success are really two same things, except that one has a reward and a different name. Despite this, you learn the same amount and experience the same thing each way. First of all, learning from the mistakes of MacArthur in the Korean War, America succeeded in winning it. Second, by using a structure from one of my best essays, I got good scores the other times I wrote an essay. Some say losers are winners while others say winning is everything. In reality, losers and winners gain the same experience, knowledge, and insight, and, in the end, thats what matters most.</p>