<p>Hey, please grade my essay (1-12) and offer some constructive criticism. I wrote this in about 20-21 minutes and completely filled up the two pages. Please don't grade mainly on content - I probably made some factual errors in my 2nd and especially my 3rd example, as I was rushed and my brain stopped. Plus I don't think the essay graders focus on that.</p>
<p>Prompt: Can success be disastrous?</p>
<p>Success is a pinnacle in human achievement, a triumph over momentous obstacles. Yet despite this, several examples from literature and history reveal how the unprecedented results of success can make these advancements disastrous. This tumultuous success demonstrates the utmost need for provident planning with achievement.
For example, the British success in the burning of Washington in the war of 1812 reveals how success can elicit overconfidence, resulting in future catastrophes. The British army experienced a great triumph when it invaded America's capital. It succeeded in depleting American resources, burning down vital political buildings,and crippling American morale. Yet the army did not anticipate the burgeoning power of the patriots in Baltimore. Indeed, the success at Washington resulted in a reckless pursuit of the Americans at Baltimore. This led to a deleterious defeat, and the temporary success at Washington only signaled future failure. This success led to a disastrous collapse, for it stimulated recklessness and overconfidence.
Furthermore, success resulted in catastrophe for Frederick Douglass in The Narratives of Frederick Douglass. Douglass, a former slave, had escaped from slavery by running away from his previous master, Mr. Covey. He transcended the North-South barrier and finally reached the North, where he believed he would experience freedom. Yet this advancement was short-lived, for he struggled with vicious discrimination and animosity from the segregated neighbourhoods even in the North. He failed in achieving true freedom. Indeed, his success consistently led to disaster with the ubiquitous hate speeches and discrimination towards African-Americans at the time. Douglass's improvidence in success, his lack of prediction of future consequences, reveals how success can often result in further tumult.
Another example of how success can be disastrous is the defeat of Saddam Hussein's regime in Iraq. With the Iraqi War starting in the early 21st century, Americans sought to uproot terrorism in the Middle East and topple Hussein's dictatorship. Along with Iraqi citizens, the U.S. armed forces succeeded in ending Hussein's tyrannical leadership. However, this temporary triumph only spelled animosity and disorder within the crippled Iraqi government. Anti-American fervor spread and Iraqi citizens were left ungoverned and prone to terrorists. Such disaster led to further threats from other Middle-East countries like Afghanistan and Iran. The U.S.'s success in the Iran War only resulted in intensified tumult for the oppressed Iraqis, and further U.S. involvement in Middle Eastern tumultuous affairs.
The successes of the British in the War of 1812, Frederick Douglass, and the U.S. in the Iraq War evince how advancement can be deleterious. Only through provident planning and careful rumination can one avoid the potential dangers success harbingers.</p>
Conclusion can go a bit farther (If the British had not been overconfident, they would have…)</p>