Can someone read and critique my Common App essay? I can provide feedback too!

College Essays
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<p>Hello,
I have written my essay and desperately need some positive criticism on it for further improvement, especially because I am doing EA....</p>

<p>Thank you in advance! :)</p>

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<p>I can help you. Just PM me.</p>

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<p>I’ll be happy to help!</p>