Can someone read my essay for selective colleges?

Hi everyone,
I made some more changes to my essay and wonder if someone is willing to give me feedback. Thank you so much!

Prompt: The lessons we take from failure can be fundamental to later success. Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience?

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