Can someone read my essay please?!!!

<p>Hi, I am planning on applying to UPenn ED this fall and I am in the process of perfecting my common app essay. Can someone please read it and give me some constructive criticism. I would prefer that you are an alumni or actually in college. thanks!!!</p>

<p>I am a parent, and would be happy to read and give feedback.</p>

<p>ok great!!</p>

<p>I can read it for you as well. </p>

<p>@luniversite‌ r u in college, alumn, or hs student?</p>

<p>I am in college, I’ve been helping my cousins (they’re trying to apply to UPenn & Brown) with their essays, and I don’t mind helping one more prospective student.</p>

<p>i don’t mind providing feedback based on what I’ve helped others with so far</p>