Can someone read my UC app essay (I need advice)

<p>I wrote on the UC prompt #1 and I am not sure if it is took risky of a subject to write about. Also, i need i fresh pair of eyes to take and look and tell me what they think (preferably above '08)
Can anyone help me out?</p>

<p>Thank you</p>

<p>i'll read it, although im 08</p>

<p>I will read your intro as well if you like.</p>

<p>I'll read it</p>

<p>i will read it pm me</p>