<p>I am an international student and I don't know if I did this right. Please someone review my essay and send me your comments.</p>
<p>Thank you</p>
<p>It would help if you detailed what colleges the essays are for 
Pm me if you want my thoughts</p>
<p>okay, I will. and the essays are for Barnard, Northeastern, BU, NYU, UMiami, Rochester, Trinity (CN), TCU, Penn state, Loyola, and Smith. :)</p>
<p>Don’t take this the wrong way, but I think you need to change your entire topic. Death is something that is, though not necessarily frowned up, not liked as much as something that has a bit more humour or self analysis.</p>
<p>I’m guessing this is your Common app personal statement right?</p>
<p>Try These links…they helped me out A LOT!!!</p>
<p>[Common</a> Application Personal Essay - Tips and Samples for the 6 Essay Options](<a href=“http://collegeapps.about.com/od/essays/a/EssayPrompts.htm]Common”>Pre-2013 Common Application Personal Essay Tips)</p>
<p>[Application</a> Essays: Tips for Writing Winning College Application Essays](<a href=“http://collegeapps.about.com/od/essays/a/essay_tips.htm]Application”>Tips for Writing a Winning College Application Essay)</p>
<p>I’ll send you my essay if you want to see something of the type that you should write! :)</p>