Can someone take a look at my Princeton Supplemental Essay?

College Essays
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<p>I'm not sure if my essay is what I want it to be, so I'm looking for some more opinions. It's about 625 words. Thanks! :)</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look at it. </p>

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<p>I’ll take a look bro.</p>

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<p>I will too </p>

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<p>Same.</p>