Can someone tell me whether this is a good dismissal letter?

<p>Anonymous:
Is this a good appeal letter?</p>

<p>Dear Academic Appeals Committee:</p>

<p>My name is ******** and I have attend *****<strong><em>or the past two semesters. I currently have a *</em></strong> GPA of 1.087 average which is below the required 2.0 average therefore I have been academically disqualified after failing to raise my average after a semester on academic probation. I do not blame anyone but myself for this consequence, I was not fully prepared to properly keep up with my work. I do believe that I did not perform to the best of my abilities. I am sorry for the shortcoming to my courses in both of my semester, however I do wish to explain the extenuating circumstances which sidetracked me from my studies.</p>

<p>During my Fall 2011 probation period, I retook two of my previous classes that I had received a D in which was HRM 360 and Math 115, along with two other classes which were H SC 425I and Business Finance 300. I started the semester off right, I formed a study group in two of the classes, I had set aside time to study and I was lucky enough to have had a friends in all of my classes. But sadly I hit a hurdle in the semester that caused me to stray away from the track that I was on. Towards my second midterm in my classes I had lost my second job that I had obtained to help pay for my living expenses. With the lost of my second job I had to extra hours at my remaining job to cover the expense. Needless to say with the extra hours taken at work, my study time was reduced and thus resulted my into doing bad on the midterms. Instead of taking the advice given to me from my friend and remember what I had learned in the academic success workshop and dropping the classes at this point or talking to the teachers I stayed in the class. As a result I only passed HRM 360 and received the grade of D in the other three classes.</p>

<p>The steps that I have taken and will continue to follow throughout my academic career will be the following. In the short term I will aim for the necessary 1.95 GPA average, if not 2.0. Over the rest of my academic career I believe I can not only n reach my high school average of a 2.5 but exceed it and reach a 3.5 average. I intend to utilize the professors’ office hours something that I should have done more last semester. By doing this I can address any questions, concerns with any concepts that was taught in class with the professor and also keep track of my grade with the professor. I also intend to utilize the tutoring center for the classes that I find to be more difficult than most. When I did use the tutoring center last semester for Math 115 it not only helped me understand the concept better but also increase my confidence on the topic. Along with these steps I also intend on continuing forming study groups with other students in the class seeing how this was very beneficial in my HRM 360. The study group helped me understand the topic since it was coming from another student, which made it a easier to get the full picture of the topic. Now that my financial situation has be situated, I now have a set schedule that does not exceed 27.5 hours a week. This allows me to put my educational work first and also allows me to set a structured study schedule.am determined to focus more on my academic career, and would greatly appreciate another opportunity to recommit to becoming a much better study. </p>

<p>I really hope that you will accept my heartfelt appeal. I promise I will not disappoint you anymore. I, therefore, would humbly request this committee to give me one more chance to continue my studies uninterruptedly so that I can prove myself that I have what it takes to follow my dream.</p>

<p>Thank you very much for your time. I look forward to your favorable judgment on my application.</p>

<p>Well before you submit this give it to someone you know who is good with essay reviews and have them identify mistakes. There are many grammatical errors among this essay. Overall, the letter seems to be OK.</p>

<p>thanks you.</p>

<p>Yes. Your essay needs to be corrected for grammatical mistakes.</p>

<p>Now that my financial situation has be situated, I now have a set schedule that does not exceed 27.5 hours a week.</p>

<p>I don’t think that will sit well with the review committee. It will look like you still won’t have enough time to devote to your studies. </p>

<p>*In the short term I will **aim for the necessary 1.95 GPA **average, if not 2.0. *</p>

<p>I don’t think that sounds very promising, either.</p>

<p>I know this will sound harsh, and I know it’s not why you posted (so feel free not to read further), but as a parent I will tell you that your appeal letter only confirms that you are not ready for college at this point in your life. Having to work extra hours at a job (actually, working FEWER hours altogether) will not suffice as an explanation for your very poor performance. Promises to do what you already knew very well you should have been doing (office hours, tutoring, study groups) are meaningless. Getting three D’s when you are already on probation shows that you either did not take your studies seriously, you weren’t academically able to handle them, or you could not manage a full-time academic schedule with a heavy part-time job. In any case, it would not be surprising if the school decided that your spot should go to someone else. Perhaps you should think hard about whether that assessment is correct. A year off to think long and hard about why you did so poorly during your probationary semester and to consider where you want to go in life and how to get there (including the advisability of attending school part-time) may be the best thing for you at this point.</p>

<p>I understand where your coming from MommaJ but I live with my grandmother and I pay for a majority of the bills including rent. So by me losing my second job did affect my school performance, I started the semester off with B’s in all of my classes, I wasnt just performing bad all semester.</p>

<p>It sounds like you have a heavy burden of responsibilities. Perhaps attending school part-time makes the most sense for you. Better to get B’s in a couple of courses than C’s in a full semester. Life’s not a race, and slowing down may be the answer here. As far as your appeal letter goes, it can only help to explain more about your personal circumstances and why the loss of employment had such serious repercussions for you. In the meantime, you should develop a Plan B in case your appeal fails.</p>

<p>Yes I do but now my burden has been relieved because I have help now coming from my uncle who now sends money to help with the expenses and now with one job I’m getting a promotion that comes with a pay raise and a set schedule that works perfectly with my schooling.</p>

<p>Maybe you should include that to show them that your circumstances will be better.</p>