<p>@QuantMech
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<p>I agree with Pizzagirl – you are focusing on mechanics of writing or choice of subject, whereas the college admissions staff is focusing on content and overall impressions. Again - the whole POINT is to either supply the college admissions staff with important information about the applicant that isn’t going to show up in other ways, and/or to grab their attention in some way. It helps if the essay is well-written – but it doesn’t have to be. </p>
<p>My d. wrote humorous, light-hearted, self-deprecating essays. Yes, my d. did submit an essay that started with her presence in far-flung locale, included dialogue, and ended with an epiphany-- though she didn’t use that word. But the fact that she had spent a semester abroad during high school was a key selling point of her application - and the essay gave insight as to how she responded to the predicament she created for herself. (Far from home, living with strangers, with only a rudimentary ability to speak and understand the local language). </p>
<p>Students seem to approach elite admissions as if it is a competition they need to win – they want to have the best test scores, they sign up for every possible AP and honors course at their high schools in order to achieve the “most rigorous” curriculum, of course they strive for an astronomical weighted GPA along with val or sal status at their schools, they choose EC’s from among the offerings via their high school and strive for leadership roles (“President”, “Editor”, “Captain”) – and they write essays that they hope will impress the ad com with how smart they are. </p>
<p>And the admissions readers at the elite colleges can’t tell one app from another. In their home communities these students may be seen as exceptional and extraordinary – but when stacked against a bunch of other applicants with the same high test scores, the same high grades, the same courses completed, the same types of EC’s,-- they all look the same, and in that context seem routine and ordinary.</p>
<p>My d. had a friend at Princeton who played the bagpipes, well enough to have attended and participated in some international competitions. I never met the kid and have no idea whether or not he wrote an essay about bagpipes … but I have a hunch it is the sort of thing that would have been included in his app. It’s not that there’s anything wonderful about bagpipes… it’s just that “bagpipes” is more memorable and attention-getting than “saxophone”. </p>
<p>My d. approached college admissions not as a competition, but as if she were auditioning for a role. She took her own path through high school, and then what it was time to choose a college list, took stock of her own strengths and targeted reach schools that would appreciate those strengths. (For safeties it didn’t really matter - her GPA was enough to guarantee her a spot at the in-state public). My daughter wasn’t auditioning for the “lead” role – just as she didn’t have the looks or the talent to get that sort of role in high school plays, she didn’t have the stats to try to convince the ad com that she was smarter or better-prepared than other applicants. She auditioned for a character part. </p>