College Essay for MIT

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<p>I don't want to misinterpret MIT's essay prompt. Could someone please provide some clarification as to what prompt B is asking for? I'm wondering whether my essay will fit their "mold".</p>

<p>Here's a general description of my essay:</p>

<p>The essay begins with a vivid description of a smog-polluted world. It then goes on to describe my being affected by this vision and my being motivated to somehow change our planet. The essay transitions to my collaboration with a number of professors and forum members in finding a way to produce hydrogen (to replace conventional petroleum) developing at an extremely efficient rate. The essay then goes on to describe what its discovery means to the world—how it can and will make a difference. Throughout the essay, I emphasize my inventive abilities, perseverance, and inner motivations, and my aspirations to make the planet a better place.</p>

<p>Here's the Prompt:</p>

<p>An application to MIT is much more than a set of test scores, grades and activities. It's often a reflection of an applicant's dreams and aspirations, dreams shaped by the worlds we inhabit. We'd like to know a bit more about your world. Describe the world you come from, for example your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations</p>

<p>Would greatly appreciate any assistance you can provide.
Thanks!</p>

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<p>Seems fine to me. Personally, I don't really like your description of the essay, but maybe the actual essay is better than it sounds.</p>

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<p>I at first described my experiences as a boy scout and how going to camps inspired me to do science by getting in touch with nature. The essay then transitioned into my scientific project in building a nearly frictionless windmill, which I wrote up and presented in a conference at UC Berkeley recently. However, I think both of our essays are a bit cliche. I think you should stick to one aspect of your world and describe in greatly in detail with much insight. Good luck to the both of us!</p>

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<p>This post is three years old -- zking786 is now a junior at MIT majoring in mechanical engineering and management. So clearly his essay worked well enough. :)</p>

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<p>Lmao!! 10char</p>