Common App essay help

<p>Please,can anyone critique my essay?I have already written three and torn them to pieces because they didn't sound like me.I am really in need of an honest judge.I'll be more than grateful if someone can help</p>

<p>I can critique! But can you help me decide what topic i should write on as well?</p>

<p>sure,I’ll PM it over.Has anything happened to you or you have done that has greatly influenced your way of thinking?"</p>

<p>Do send in your views on the essay.</p>