Common App essay!

<p>Hi all! I'd really appreciate it if you could read and offer some helpful critiques of my common app essay (it's the one about fictional character). For some reason it still doesn't seem right to me T_T Comment and I'll pm you!
Thank you very much!</p>

<p>I’d be happy to!</p>

<p>Me too! PM me if you want to.:)</p>

<p>sure, message me your essay</p>