Common Application Essay Topic

<p>Do you think this topic is appropriate for the common app question about a significant experience that has shaped you?
I want to talk about an experience I had while volunteering at the local hospital where I needed to spend hours with a child whose both parents had suffered severe food poisoning. The child was crying because he thought that his parents were not gonna make it (even though they were). I was able to spend enough time with the child and make a relationship so that he was no longer crying. The next day, the child and his parents walked out of the hospital and he bought me a thank you balloon. I want to say how this experience made helped me realize that I want to be helping people the rest of my life. I will tie the whole story to my aspirations of becoming a pediatrician. I remember the store in great detail, and I will make sure to express emotions throughout the story. Please give me your honest opinion.</p>

<p>Thank you ssheth. Do you think that this essay could be successful with good writing skills? Overall, do you think that this topic can create a great essay?</p>