Could anyone please rate my UIUC college essays? I'll inbox them!

<p>Hey, so I'm a senior and I wrote my UIUC college essays. Would anyone mind reading them? I'll inbox them to whomever is willing to read them. Please rate them on a scale of 1-10. Tell me what's good, what's bad, what I should change or remove and what I should keep or fix/enhance. Some tips or strategies would be appreciated. Also I overshot the 300 word limit by 30 on Essay 1 and 20 on Essay 2. Is that okay or should I shorten them to exactly 300 or 310? Thanks!</p>

<p>I can! </p>

<p>Are you new to CC? @prog694</p>

<p>Yep. But I have been using this site for a long time. I joined so I could help you read your college essays :)</p>

<p>Bump</p>

<p>@prog694‌ hey! i am another high school senior applying to UIUC, would you mind to read my essays for me and give your thoughts? if you can i would really appreciate it! here is the link
<a href=“http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/university-illinois-urbana-champaign/1710816-please-help-me-to-revise-my-essay.html#latest”>http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/university-illinois-urbana-champaign/1710816-please-help-me-to-revise-my-essay.html#latest&lt;/a&gt;
thank you!</p>

<p>Have any of you considered the possibility that @prog694‌ may ALSO be a high school senior and may just end up taking ‘inspiration’ from your essays? Don’t get your essays read by random people on the internet. You have friends you trust, teachers, counselors, and family to help you with that.</p>

<p>I know you probably don’t want to trust random ppl, which I understand, but I’ve already submitted my app to UIUC (priority bioE), and I’ve posted on other forums and have been on CC for a while, so you can trust me if you’d like someone to read essays. I’m willing to read to help people get in where they want to. Also, if you want to find maybe a more reputable medium go to a website called chalky (.com), they have several students in college and high school students looking for and offering help on essays! It’s a great sight that I’ve been using.</p>

<p>@kaykay12350‌ I sure will read your essays. Will give you feedback once I read it!
@narmanc‌ I already submitted my essays before this post so nobody will need to worry about me getting “inspiration” from their essays. Also, I’m pretty sure we are majoring in different areas.</p>

<p>Sure! Just that I’ve actually read cases of online plagiarism, so now I’m careful to send essay to strangers online.</p>