Could someone just provide feedback to me on my rutgers college essay

<p>Prompt: Rutgers University is a vibrant community of people with a wide variety of backgrounds and experiences. How would you benefit from and contribute to such an environment? Consider variables such as your talents, travels, leadership activities, volunteer services, and cultural experiences. Only personal essays submitted via our website will be considered. You may enter a maximum of 3800 characters including spaces
If someone could just provide some feedback, it would be greatly appreciated.</p>

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