could someone look at my commonapp. essay? need help!!!!

College Essays
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<p>i really need your help.
i have complete my essay recently. and the topic of commonapp. is “Topic of your choice”
i am not sure if my essay is well classified in this sector.
and i also have some problem to improve my grammar use and content. i am an international student.</p>

<p>please look at my essay and give me some suggestions..
i really appreciate your guys help.</p>

<p>or could you recommend some good editing services.
please pm me or send me e-mails if you would like to help me.
email. <a href="mailto:grace.sunc@gmail.com">grace.sunc@gmail.com</a></p>

<p>I'm applying to bates, brandeis, notre dame, wellesley,Vanderbilt, Franklin and Marshall College, Williams, Duke, Hamilton,University of Richmond and uiuc. </p>

<p>Let me know if you are a current undergraduate or prospective applicant please.</p>

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<p>You can send it to me. I’m an applicant, but I intend to be an English major so I can try my best to give honest feedback/criticism. I’m new to this site, so is there any way you can send it to me in a message through this site?</p>

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<p>AJH11293,
i really appreciate your help.
i’ll pm u~~</p>

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<p>please help~anyone?</p>