could someone read my essay? please?

<p>Hi! I was wondering if anyone could read my personal statement for university of washington. I wrote this in one sitting this morning and if someone could tell me what could get cut or how I could rephrase things or just how interesting my essay is. BE HONEST!
oh and no seniors for 2010. I would prefer someone who is in college and has already gone through the admissions process.</p>

<p>I am not applying to Washington . Only to drexel university and my essay has been sent . </p>

<p>PM me and I will help you out .</p>