Could someone review my Williams College supplement essay?

<p>I would greatly appreciate it- as a transfer applicant, I need as much help as I can get.</p>

<p>I can help you proofread it. You can pm me the file link or your essay.
If the file is too big, you can send to my email if you need.</p>

<p>I can help pm me</p>

<p>I have finish polishing the essay for you. I add a few sentences and change some wordings to make the feeling stronger.
Hope you will like it.</p>

<p>I’ll read and proof-read if you still want help. </p>

<p>PM me :)</p>