I did a practice DBQ today in preparation for the upcoming exam. I spent approximately 50 minutes + 15 minute planning period on it, so I seem to be on target. It would be greatly appreciated if someone could grade my DBQ and give me any tips!</p>
Here is the prompt:
<a href=“http://apcentral.collegeboard.com/apc/public/repository/ap07_us_hist_frq.pdf[/url]”>http://apcentral.collegeboard.com/apc/public/repository/ap07_us_hist_frq.pdf</a></p>
And my essay:
<a href=“https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pU5MSFg18T6hoW-0eZqNNkGTCvbQT23V0ARRRBMpCRI/edit[/url]”>https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pU5MSFg18T6hoW-0eZqNNkGTCvbQT23V0ARRRBMpCRI/edit</a></p>
Thanks everyone!</p>
I read through it rather quickly, but I think you did a really good job. You really adhered to the prompt and supplied good examples and support from the documents. </p>
I’m not too great at giving essays scores, but I would give yours a 7 or 8!</p>
One thing–the ending was a little abrupt. Perhaps add something to tie it all together.</p>
Good luck on Friday! I’m really anxious/excited to get APUSH over with. I love the subject, but AP stress has been killing me.</p>
Thanks! I was wondering if it was worth adding a conclusion or not, considering that it takes time. But if it seems abrupt, I will be sure to do that on the exam.</p>
Good luck to you too!</p>
You need to group documents. They were all in individual paragraphs with no ties between them. </p>
Also you should never say “document A says” or anything along those lines. Say something like “In an article published in Oklahoma Magazine (doc I)”. It just sounds a lot better if you do it this way.</p>
As HCLcoasters said, you have to group documents together into one central idea with 2 documents minimum. You cannot assess two or more documents at the same time however.</p>
Take a look at the scoring PDF on the same website on how the DBQs are graded</p>
I’m sorry, but what do you guys mean when you say to group the documents? Ty for the help BTW</p>
I think they are referring to your use of “the photograph in Document C depicts” and “the author of Document F.” Don’t say this; just say “the photograph from ____” or “(author’s name).” You should only use “Document” when you cite the document internally using parentheses–for example, “all available for cultivation due to new technology. (Doc. C)”</p>
Pretty minor thing, but it really polishes your work. Definitely not something you pick up when you’re writing so quickly! Haha</p>
Best of luck tomorrow. I am just ready to get this done!!</p>
No. What I meant is that you have to “group” documents together and use them together in a body paragraph to express a point of view.</p>
Let’s say you have two documents and they are related to religion. Therefore, you have to use both documents in a religious viewpoint.</p>
Decent essay, I say 7. Yes, you should have a short conclusion. Like others have said, never say things like “the photograph in document d depicts…” - don’t actually mention the documents in your writing, except for parenthetical citations at the end of sentences (Doc D). Instead, say something like “Farmers created massive bonanza farms, in which large tracts of land were used to harvest wheat - so large, that the widespread use of these farms led to overproduction and resulting deflation (doc D).”
More specific info would be nice, although it’s difficult to retain every date and important event. If I had taken this DBQ, I would have mentioned The Grange Movement, Interstate Commerce Act, Populist Party and election of 1896 (you mentioned this), Munn V. Illinois and the following Wabash V. Illinois, Panic of 1893, bonanza farms, dawes severalty act (maybe? idk if this applies), how cattle ranching and bonanza farms became ruled by large corporations, pacific railway act of 1862, etc. etc. You basically want at least half of your evidence to be your own a.k.a. not copied from documents.</p>
You do not <em>need</em> to group your documents (organize and discuss them by common theme, topic, POV, etc.) for APUSH DBQs. That is a requirement and rubric category for AP World, but not for APUSH. It is a good strategy, but your essay flows well from topic to topic as it is and you integrate the documents well. </p>
Your essay is a little unbalanced, especially on the discussion of farmers’ responses (grange, farmers alliances, populist party, etc.) and the lack of a conclusion and restated thesis hurts the focus a bit. You have a good amount of outside information and no major factual errors. </p>
You’re looking at a pretty solid 6 here, IMO.</p>