Could you please read my business essay?

<p>Im applying to Georgetown U, McDonough School of Business and I have written an essay for the question: Briefly describe the factors that have influenced your interest in studying business.</p>

<p>I would appreciate if those could read it who are not seniors applying to Georgetown University.</p>

<p>I'm international, so I'd really need your corrections in this essay:)
I would PM it.
thanks</p>