Critique my CommonApp Essay?

<p>If you need any more feedback, I would love to help.</p>

<p>I’d be glad to read over it and provide some feedback! Just send it to me through a PM.</p>

<p>I would like to read it (:</p>

<p>Pm me dude!!</p>

<p>Pm me. More than happy to read it</p>

<p>I’ll read it. Pm me.</p>

<p>I’ll read it as well!</p>

<p>sure, i’ll read it, i’ll PM you back an opinion</p>

<p>pm me, and ill read it!=)</p>