Anyone willing to critique my commonapp essay?

<p>Hey guys.</p>

<p>Applying to Harvard, Princeton and probably Stanford. The essay is really personal and I wrote on the first topic - share a background story.</p>

<p>Leave me a PM if you're interested, we could exchange as well. </p>

<p>Thanks</p>

<p>Well I cant PM yet, but ill like to read it. could you PM me.</p>

<p>I will, if you like. Also, an exchange would be appreciated, I desperately need a new set of eyes on mine haha.</p>

<p>I can’t PM yet, but you can PM it to me. I’d love to read it.</p>