Critique my intro?

<p>I'm doing the CA prompt "Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?" and writing about being around my band. If anyone wouldn't mind reading through it, I'd like to know whether my intro is solid, at least in concept, while I'm still figuring out where to go with the rest of the essay. Thank you!</p>

<p>Sure, PM me!</p>